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PostSubject: Tsuki, Azumi   Mon Jul 27, 2009 4:17 pm

Weapon Name: White Lotus
Type: Sword
Description: The blade is 3 feet long and is pure steel, weighs 2 tons.
Advantages: The blade can cut through objects easier then most swords.
Disadvantages: Is difficult to handle due to it's weight: Does not move as quickly: So long as I'm holding it I am unable to move freely.


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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Mon Jul 27, 2009 9:57 pm

The advantages sound godmodding. A sword that can cut through any material with little effort, cannot even be broken nor become dull, is too much for a sword.

You need 3 -good- weaknesses for your weapon. The disadvantages don't seem like good weaknesses nor disadvantages at all.
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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Tue Jul 28, 2009 2:33 pm

Kay~
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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Tue Jul 28, 2009 2:42 pm

That it weights 2 ton is not a good disadvantage. You must make it so that the disadvantages make the advantage not be godmodding.

Other words; I think advantages is still too godmodding. As it cannot even be broken as well as cutting through objects easily.
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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Tue Jul 28, 2009 2:47 pm

I don't get what you're saying about that.

I said it is DIFFICULT to break. It can but it would take some force for that. Plus, cutting through things easily is just something swords do.
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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Tue Jul 28, 2009 2:54 pm

There are objects that have stronger material than a sword's material.

Like gold. If a sword would try and cut gold, it would break.
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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Tue Jul 28, 2009 3:03 pm

... What does that have to do with it's weight.

Okay, then it'll break if I try to cut through gold or something. I didn't say it could cut easily through ALL objects. Like wood. Swords can cut through that without breaking, but mine can just cut through it easier.
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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Tue Jul 28, 2009 3:07 pm

Azumi-chan, you aren't in any trouble. Lovel is right with his decisions. Infact, I want to help you a bit if you don't mind. And I also hope you don't find me being too harsh.

dis⋅ad⋅van⋅tage

Use Disadvantages in a Sentence
–noun
1. absence or deprivation of advantage or equality.
2. the state or an instance of being in an unfavorable circumstance or condition: to be at a disadvantage.
3. something that puts one in an unfavorable position or condition: His bad temper is a disadvantage.
4. injury to interest, reputation, credit, profit, etc.; loss: Your behavior is a disadvantage to your family's good name.

A disadvantage is basically something that while using your weapon, will do something to you in turn. Having the sword weighing 2 tons, does not harm/injure/effect you in any way. Therefore a weapon that is 2 tons is merely a feature of the weapon.

I'll try to help you. Since the weapon ways 2 tons, as a disadvantage, you are able to say that the weapon is not as fast as most, and very slow maneuvering.

You also must describe more on how it is 'difficult to handle' because that is a big subject. So please add more details in order to get your weapon approved.

Having it handled with one arm, is not a disadvantage either. I'm willing to toss in some ideas if you need it, to help you better understand Lovel's reason for unapproving your weapon so far. Please don't think that we're picking on you, we're just making things more fair in a way.
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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Tue Jul 28, 2009 3:14 pm

I understand everything you're saying it's just my why of wording is different and more difficult to understand. Since we're online it's even more difficult.

I understand a disadvantage I just have a hard time coming up with them in a way that makes sense and goes along with my character in my mind.
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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Tue Jul 28, 2009 3:24 pm

I have a hard time thinking of disadvantages too. But if you need help, tell me.
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PostSubject: Re: Tsuki, Azumi   Tue Jul 28, 2009 3:31 pm

Kay~

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